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    dots Submission Name: The Romanticsdots

    Author: Fantastic Freya
    Elite Ratio:    5.05 - 133/160/47
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    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Romanticsdots

    In spite of all the pretty words that make your knees go weak,
    And similes about your eyes and oceans, stars or jewels,
    Remember, as that ruby blush brings blossoms to your cheek,
    The poet doesn't mean those things, my love, they're only tools.
    The poet is a sneaky sort who serenades the page,
    To shape its pale virginity into his lover's form,
    And once begun, his pen is not about to disengage
    From frenzied strokes of passion in his literary storm.
    This flaccid nerd by words becomes your troubadourish knight,
    His girth recedes, his hair grows thick, he's dash and derring-do,
    And you, his gentle sonnet queen, have spurred his soul to write
    Of what he'd do if only he weren't terrified of you.
    In fairyland built high upon the strata of cliché
    The poet spins his lyric lies to you, his chosen lay.

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      It's more of a cliché to be cynical though. I think I would have rather read the reasons why you can't bear some of the more flowery aspects of the romantic poets in an essay or something, after all there's nothing wrong with voicing your opinion. But to do so in a poem, to write a poem that simply attacks a certain style of poem whilst offering little in the way of alternative is just...too smug with it's own ignorance for me to enjoy. And it's a pity because the rhythmic quality and rhyming you employ show an aptitude for good poetry.
    | Posted on 2011-01-04 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      You may have singlehandedly written the epitaph for the genre of romantic poetry . LOL . For shame . So what , you had a nerdy balding boyfriend with a paunch who wrote you love poems and then suddenly decided to shuffle off to buffalo ? Seriously this no mercy attitude has got to go . You should try my poem "Dream" . It might not change your mind , but at least it's a step in the right direction . By the by , camels don't have hooves , but then again they don't have wings either of the shadowed page .

    | Posted on 2011-01-04 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      I've forgotten how the reply thing works on here -- can we have any direct dialogue in the comments section or is it all fragmented between pages? Anyway, a simple thank you from me will have to suffice while I adjust my rhyming hat.
    | Posted on 2011-01-03 00:00:00 | by Fantastic Freya | [ Reply to This ]
      the graceful gazelle
    that pawed and pranced
    cast lots with a devil
    and died in a trance
    | Posted on 2011-01-03 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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