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    dots Submission Name: Waves of Passion (rewrite)dots
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    Author: Desi
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 210/151/34
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       This is a rewrite of a poem I did a while back.


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    Waves of Passion (rewrite)
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    Moon light glistening on the water.
    Stars coming out to see,
    two lovers on a bed of silvery sand,
    not meant for you nor I to see....

    His hand swept over her .
    Thrashing, crashing, splashing
    Bodies quivering.
    Lips searching, caressing .
    Desire uniting.
    Now they are as one for all the world to see.
    Embraced by waves,
    Waves of Passion, flowing back out to sea.........




    Submitted on 2011-01-04 04:22:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       Should slivery be silvery sands. I was just wandering because, I never heard of the word before. I had to look it up and meaning didn't fit the scene. There is nothing more romantic, than two lovers on the beach at night. Thank you for sharing, enjoyed reading.

    Love of Christ,
    Christie
    | Posted on 2011-01-05 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      at first i was like seen sea dont rhyme nthen i was wonderin where the waves were comin from n then i decided that it was jus comin. ne way its cool. not really in the love mood right now tho
    | Posted on 2011-01-05 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Delightful poem, filled with passion and excellent word pictures. What can be more romantic than lovemaking at the seashore, with the allure of sand and surf!

    Nice work.
    | Posted on 2011-01-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      that creates a very powerful image. love the flow! def a favs addition right here.
    | Posted on 2011-01-04 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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