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Dorothy's 44th Ozymandian Birthday Jamboree


Author: rws
ASL Info:    62/m/Ohio
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Dorothy's 44th Ozymandian Birthday Jamboree



unblow the candles
Glinda Sue, anti-Em
said Dot to her mutt
and her three feral friends:

the dumb and the lovestruck
and the king in retreat
on paws of discretion
with a witch in pursuit

while the wizard crashlanded
at an airfield in France
shouting "Topeka!"
as he searched for his pants




Submitted on 2011-01-04 11:33:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  oh wow!! this work really show talent...
| Posted on 2012-05-21 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]
  You're just having too much fun :-D Too much fun...

| Posted on 2011-02-16 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
  Losing your pants is just one of the hazards of French air space... or so I've heard.

This is delightfully awful, Bill -- some people get terribly upset when you do bad things to favourite childhood stories, but I love the idea of "her mutt and her three feral friends". Not to mention how many political situations can be summed up by that second stanza...

| Posted on 2011-01-04 00:00:00 | by Fantastic Freya | [ Reply to This ]


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