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    dots Submission Name: Green to the Enddots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    dotsGreen to the Enddots

    Her eyes are tethered to a sun. A sun,
    a distant star, far flung, where ballads sung
    are always true, faces are a ruddy hue
    and lights in her rear view are never blue.

    The girl in fiesta lime sits sublime
    as her motor purrs in cosmic time.
    She flashes past grazing deer without fear.
    Kyle Petty would envy the way she steers.

    She flashes as she passes an old truck.
    While waving the trucker says bless my luck.
    She flashes, she dashes enthralling all
    she's the epitome of have a ball.

    With her eyes on the prize, she glides. She rides
    the wild road, high on all life provides.

    Submitted on 2011-01-05 00:35:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The chartreuse queen , she's oh so mean
    From looking for a better scene
    It seems it's only just a dream
    A distant glint of feral gleam

    It seems the urge to kill and kill
    Looks like life's only cogent thrill
    All of the blood that needs to spill
    For rectitude to have it's fill

    Yet strange as it might seem of life
    She'd really rather be a wife
    To have someone to share the strife
    And dream surreal dreams of kithe

    But this Missouri mule you see
    Would rather have a drunken spree
    With whiskey shots instead of tea
    Where happenstance occurs at three

    But she's not deaf to my refrain
    She thinks it's frankly quaintly sane
    Perhaps I'll take a wife again
    And dream demise for earthbound bane

    | Posted on 2011-01-05 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      :) I love it! Not just cuz it's soooo me (oh my oh me, few carbon footprints I now leave...)

    I love the pic too! LOL @ Kyle Petty... I am GOOD with a stick shift too, baby! :P
    | Posted on 2011-01-05 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]

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