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    dots Submission Name: One More Day?dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsOne More Day?dots
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    You try to evade the state you are in,
    grab a deep breath of air laced with fear,
    then brace against the mercurial rain.

    You sat yourself down upon the barbed wire
    that rims the toilet seat of life.
    Why are you surprised by the drops of blood
    glistening on your beaten feet?

    Oil stains your half full glass
    but it is the only rainbow on
    your withered path;
    into an ever blacker mood.

    And what comes with dark molestation
    to haunt your inner eye?
    Maybe it is the reek of burnt transmission fluid
    on a starched white faith.

    No longer the noble Toreador, you are
    lower than a worm that tunnels through earth.
    You have sunken to the neck
    in the great garbage spice. Therefore
    go ahead and evade, grab a deep
    breath of air laced with fear.

    Take a look around your not going
    anywhere, there is a flock of ravens
    hunting for some eyes and
    yours are looking good and juicy.

    Moreover, look at the great bloated moon,
    bruised fruit rotting in a worn out sky.

    It wont be long before you see that
    cigar sunrise smoking over tenements
    curdled cluster. Can you muster the
    strength, to take that breath and face

    one more day?





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      Martian warlord blues and Venusian cottage cheese . The fact I'm still alive to me . Give the greasy geez a squeeze . Teach him why you still feel free . Lothario's latent lechery , is surely good for you and me . like mother earth to father sky , it's like the sunshine in our eye . Decadent and arrogant , ephemeral exigence spent . Don't let trajectory sordid's hue , be the death of me and you .
    | Posted on 2011-01-05 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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