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    dots Submission Name: Night Musedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsNight Musedots
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    Let us dance our way out of the reliquary
    of midnight calling.
    After all
    it is the world that names us
    poor.
    Therefore
    if we must be beggars at the feast
    we will show up ringing bells.
    If we cannot set the world ablaze
    we can sit and sigh our nothings
    into one another's ear
    delighting in our hunger
    while our candle flames.




    Submitted on 2011-01-05 05:22:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like what you have set out here, Dale.
    The work has a quiet voice and is classical in feel.
    reliquary is a poem worthy word and that's one thing in which i wish i was more able, finding words that were the better match instead of those drawn from the few that i knew. looking is the answer there i suppose.

    i like all the o's in this, the words roll gently overthemselves and oneanother like the movement akin to a flame.

    i find the last lines particularly fine. the nobility of the idea, the swallow of humbleness underechoing the direness of the situation with the profoundness of the sentiment.

    meh at my sentence contruction.... it's lovely. it's very nice.
    | Posted on 2011-02-06 00:00:00 | by theludus | [ Reply to This ]
      The reliquiae requiem sounds so sweet , it has us prancing on our feet . Luridly livid allusion sings , of monetary fiscal things . Dexterously I wave my wand , with reality I would abscond . Leaving only dreams sweet caress , and what the stallion has professed . Elucubration sets the scene , while flaming banshees and harpies scream , how did he ever get so mean ? This wanton man that would be king .
    | Posted on 2011-01-05 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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