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    dots Submission Name: The Last Molt dots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsThe Last Molt dots

    Angels of the light,
    dressed in red leather and spikes
    are chanting a hymn of holy delight.
    In addition they marvel
    at the spectatorial sight,
    of the loon, burning alive
    in his own nightmarish sky.

    While hot smoking suet falls
    to fry,
    an uncaring mans
    upturned eyes.
    He glows
    he knows he is a shrieking lost soul.
    a writhing blotch of blood-lust froth.

    A stain rots in the core of his mind
    his paranoid
    shadow of a mind.
    A mind which posses as a king passing through time.
    A man whose world whips
    its way through a black graveyard
    it is only
    a leftover gleam,
    a feral dream.

    He sits alone ensconced in a palace of hunger
    longing for love
    he finds only a cold cairn of stone
    garnished by wilting roses
    and death's dying sparks.
    A signal that his end
    falls under
    the spell of the sepulcher.
    There reside the remains
    of his last molting,
    meanwhile he is now choking on his own
    golden schizoid lie.

    Submitted on 2011-01-05 08:12:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      :( Poor king... sounds like he needs a good Temple whore.... then he could be doing her and the Lord's Work at the same time, so to speak...

    I like the surreal dreaminess of this... what a soft side you've got! Melancholic and sad, wistful and dare I say, pretty in imagery. :) I like it very much.

    But I'm still serious about paragraph1 lol
    | Posted on 2011-01-07 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]

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