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    dots Submission Name: Viral Canzonedots
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    Author: Fantastic Freya
    Elite Ratio:    5.05 - 133/160/47
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsViral Canzonedots
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    And in these electronic days,
    we sit up late and bleary-eyed,
    lament the lives that we're denied
    by lack of time. We dream up ways
    to simulate the world outside,
    with apps and arses spreading wide
    to anchor us in cyber phase.

    The virtual reality
    of mood-ring tips and what's your sign
    and who's your cartoon valentine
    and romance via USB
    to mutual complacency
    consumes us as we freely dine
    on pulped-up splats of chicken spine
    devolving by online decree.

    What once had seemed a passing craze
    to fill our time, a harmless ride
    across the world is now a slide
    unchecked to hand us more delays
    to growing up. We are clichés,
    as here within our heads we hide.
    The strangers in whom we confide
    fulfil desires for endless praise.

    And yet take heed: the bourgeoisie
    are serfing too, and so the line
    is pixelated. You design
    your station here, equality
    may yet be actuality
    if we but choose to redefine
    our thoughts. Today, I start with mine:
    I am the monarch of the sea.

    Off with the tops of empty heads;
    they must be filled with words of worth.
    Go forth, ensure this virus spreads,
    and poetry shall rule the earth.





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      Hey,

    Indeed. What did people do before the Internet was born? I mean, not saying it's entirely a bad thing, I mean, without the Internet, websites like this couldn't exist. But what did people do before the web became so social? Nowadays all I see are people going on FaceBook (so glad I deleted mine, although my peers would be ashamed of me...) and those ads on TV for "eHarmony" and "Oasis" and all that. What happened to going out in the real world? Of course, all the Internet is trying to is make it easier for people to do whatever, but now, I think people rely too much on technology. But I can't say much... I'm being brought up in the digital age...
    But I completely agree with the third stanza, the Internet is getting a bit out of control.

    I like the rhyme pattern in this poem, it is something I haven't ever encountered and it makes it more interesting to read.

    Oh, if only literature and poetry ruled the earth... I, honestly, cannot imagine that. Maybe because it is something I have never come across, but perhaps we all just need a balance in life.

    I think, the more I read it, the more I understand (bits of) it. Anyway, sorry this is all over the place, I just woke up and I can't think straight...

    Thank you for sharing, :)

    --Esha
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi well met. Seems we have something’s in common flair. Take a glare in mi space. Will dissect your poem some more. I am Joachim (not English).
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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