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    dots Submission Name: "Golden Days In May"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dots"Golden Days In May"dots
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    They walked together, hand in hand
    on golden days in May
    and reveled in the surf and sand
    and frolicked in ocean spray.

    They shared a bond through many years
    and weathered good and bad
    They held each other as wet tears
    fell when their times were sad.

    They saw their children off to school
    and then out on their own
    they taught them with a golden rule
    that kept their hearts at home.

    And through it all, She never failed
    not even when her tasks
    were harder cause her body ailed
    as she put her comfort last.

    And when her time was at an end
    and he lay her body down
    He knew his spirit would never mend
    as He placed her in the ground.

    They had rejoiced through Summer
    and were mesmerized in Fall
    They'd shared their warmth in Winter
    and were bonded by it all.

    And now He savors memories
    through the lonely hours of day
    and remembers the surf and emerald seas
    and those golden days in May.




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      I loved this poem of lasting love, a love filled with sweet memories as well as a few sad, bad times.
    Being able to overcome the bad, enriches the good in every marriage. That's what is meant by the wedding vows, to encourage the happy couple to enjoy the happy moments and to work out the bad.
    No one is perfect, so mistakes will be made, wrong words will be spoken, but a loving couple will pull through those sad times.
    Loved your poem Ron, it was a well written sonnet to marriage
    | Posted on 2011-05-01 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my goodness you do it again... Bring tears to my eyes you have such a simple yet complex way of detailing something so poignant and even passionate. I can feel the sadness yet the love in this poem wonderful my new favorite!
    | Posted on 2011-01-19 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so beautiful with a hint of melancholy. A story told with such a great poetic sense. The pictures you have created are one of love and loss. It's such a nice story of caring, but at the same time, one that portrays menial house tasks in a different way. In that sometimes it is the little things that count.

    Thank you for sharing. (:

    --Esha
    | Posted on 2011-01-09 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the way you rhyme. Beautiful, like all of your work.
    Love of Christ,
    Christie
    | Posted on 2011-01-07 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      Thankyou very much for this poem. It was quite touching. I not only enjoyed your way with words I enjoyed the story.

    This was my favorite portion. It drew out the most emotion from me.

    "And when her time was at an end
    and he lay her body down
    He knew his spirit would never mend
    as He placed her in the ground."
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by no name yet | [ Reply to This ]
      as always its a pleasure to read your work, this actually hit a little too close to home for me just because i lost my grandmother in '08 and this describes my grandparents very much. both of my grandparents were from england, but they grew up there during the war so they spend alot of time in ireland with family. this was a beautiful piece and im so glad i read it today it lifted my spirits a little.
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      This is truely beautiful and sad at the same time. Mothers do put themselves last as my mother in my poem "Pillow of Fear" did.
    A beautiful sad love story. A poetic story writer, you do this so well. I wonder if like me at times you write of your own moments in life. Love reading your poem, thank you for sharing with us your talent. Desi
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]


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