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    dots Submission Name: Beauty?dots
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    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
    Total Views: 626
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    Description:
       Needs a bit of work :/

    Um, I can already guess that people mightn't like the repitition. Like I said, needs work. Bash it.

    I got the idea from when we were driving up to Cairns and my brother was just playing PSP. My Dad told him to try and enjoy the beauty of outside. All I saw was a blur of green and mountains and hills and stuff. I cbf to explain at the moment.
    EDIT: Got rid of the last two lines... :/ not sure what to do.
    yay.


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    dotsBeauty?dots
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    What is beauty?

    Is it that girl who is covered in plastic?
    Or the kid who stands up against being called a spastic?
    Is it that great new ute you bought?
    Or is it that gargantuan fish you caught?

    Is it that fabulous piece of art?
    Or an orchestration by Mozart?
    Is it the green scenery outside?
    Or is it the actual ride?

    Is it what you see in the mirror?
    Or the fact that you do eat dinner? (alternate line: Or the fact you aren't any thinner?)
    Is it that couple standing over there?
    Or the person alone, without a care?

    Is it that person helping another?
    Or is it that girl hugging her brother?


    Beauty is in the eye of the beholder.

    But what is beauty?




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      i think all of these examples define beauty very well...

    there is so much beauty around us...and often we never notice it....never pay enough attention ...we just buzz through life at full speed not appreciating people, places or objects enough for their aesthetics.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      It's funny because my mom always reminds me to look at what's outside rather than what i'm distracting myself with. I finally started to look outside the window more but it's only thanks to her consistent bugging that thought me to do that. Otherwise, I'd still be like your brother; in front of a book or a psp.

    True that beauty is in the eye of the beholder. I feel that line has been used too often. I'm sure you can concoct a new imagery that says the same proverb. The questionning seem to work in this piece.

    "I fear I am walking blindly
    unaware of the wealth blazing in front of me
    or is it a fortune I seek to understand
    Is this a beauty worthy to be grand?"

    PS: I like the thinner part better.

    Nicely written.

    Cheers,

    charmedidentity


    | Posted on 2011-01-07 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought it was sweetly written. Beauty... it varies by fetish I guess, there's nothing that isn't beautiful to someone... as for the alternative line, it reminded me of this:

    http://www.absoluteskinny.com/

    So you see, everything is beautiful in it's own way... depending on who's into what.
    | Posted on 2011-01-07 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      that picture is a classic.

    the rhyme in this reminded me
    of the princess bride and:
    for whatever reason,

    that was good today.

    go on about your business.

    (for those of you who might not know,
    a ute is a cool-as ride, especially if it's a holden.)
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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