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    dots Submission Name: the Dark of Our Roomdots
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    Author: TheLunaticRose
    ASL Info:    21/F/Spokane
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 1/2/3
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 313
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 967



    Description:
       For him, I have loved him forever.


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    In the dark of our room,
    We hide,
    Away from the horrors of life,
    We hold each other,
    Your arms so strong around me,
    Your heart beat pounding through my back,
    Our fingers interlaced,
    The world fades away,
    There are no train whistles,
    No cars driving by,
    No pain,
    No fear,
    In this space, just you and I,
    I am safe,
    You have me, All of me, I am not afraid,
    You brush your lips against shoulder,
    Pull me closer,
    Your sweet voice whispering into my ear,
    Gooseflesh covers my body,
    Running your fingers over my skin,
    "I love you beautiful"
    Your beautiful words,
    Touching my soul,
    You take my breath away,
    Make me shiver,
    Your gentle touch,
    I am yours,
    Forever my love,
    I am yours.




    Submitted on 2011-01-07 05:07:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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