Love, Your Nocturnal Daylight Elf -------------------------------------------
Breath in the sweat scent of what you need
the nutrients is not of life force
but of esteem.
A sharp prick, a numb pain
the voices begin to scream
the movie screen flickers the never ending story
chains relinquish unbound demons of the past
the pace quickens with the flow
slowly drained of new found strength
regress to an old mental state.
the sea tosses within
as the spine dances away with the wind.
A blanket of white
atop a crimson ground
Distance creeps a close bound patch of earth.
Found with embracing gaze
slipping away within clasped hands.
Day and night
a hard compromise
. . .
on the horizon the sun doth rise. . .
I like this a lot for the imagery. Also the lines ending with the wind/within caught my interest. However you tried too much at the end with compromise/sun doth rise. Doth doesn't work. I would prefer the sun rises. Doth might work in an arcane usage but I didn't have that sense as it seems the speaker's exploration puts various things together past and present. The first two lines are are difficult. Probably because there is a typo in the first line of sweat instead of sweet although sweat scent has some merit on its own used in another way. The second line stops me at is because the verb doesn't agree with the noun nutrients but instead with life force.