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    dots Submission Name: Forgetting to flydots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    26/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 63/298/259
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 543
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsForgetting to flydots
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    You came to me broken and jaded
    Your joy had faded
    Like a breath of fresh air
    I brought you back from the brink
    Showed you the missing link
    I hugged away your tears
    Scared away your fears
    Now you are whole
    I taught you to fly
    Now it's goodbye 
    Suddenly you turn cold
    I've served my purpose
    Now your me cutting loose
    Leaving me here to die
    You sucked out my life
    Then cut me Like a knife
    Now I'm broken and jaded
    My joy has faded
    I'm struggling to breathe
    Close to the edge
    I've forgotten how to fly...




    Submitted on 2011-01-08 05:57:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      very very very good. Not many people are talented to write like this. you are this was awsome thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2011-02-08 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good. Healing someone from the wounds of their past only to be scorned and left broken. You captured it well
    | Posted on 2011-01-09 00:00:00 | by TheInvisible | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually know how that feels :'/
    | Posted on 2011-01-08 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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