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    dots Submission Name: Operations A Mustdots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Lot of shit on my mind... And I dont wanna think anymore...


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    dotsOperations A Mustdots
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    In this moment
    let there be nothing
    nothing but silence
    as we operate

    it's a strange request,
    not being
    asked to remove
    his dreams

    but that he should
    want it done with a spoon
    because its dull
    and it will hurt more

    The patient
    suffers dillusions
    along the lines
    that if he no longer dreams
    he is no longer human

    and there for
    not subject to
    any further emotional pain
    for the contiunce of his life..

    So he has choosen
    this to be the last thing
    he feels

    However I feel it must be said
    that it is unfortunate
    how much faith
    the patient has placed
    in such an unorthodox procedure

    When all is said and done
    I am quite certain
    he will wake to find
    that this is one more
    failed dream
    that will surely haunt him...

    "Doctor, wouldn't it have
    just been easier to
    give him Lithium?"




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    ||| Comments |||
      Ouch! My immediate thought is that dreams are excreted like so many other such body functions. What's the equivalent to fiber?
    | Posted on 2011-01-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      As a schizophrenic I think I agree .
    | Posted on 2011-01-09 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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