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    dots Submission Name: Spider Controldots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
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    dotsSpider Controldots
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    Itsy bitsy spiders
    are crawling through my house.
    They are under the bed.
    They have webbed my head.
    One thing is certain
    I will not be needing curtains.

    My mouse
    still has a job,
    the spiders call him Bob.
    Bob runs his wheel.
    Poor Bob,
    the spiders like when Bob squeals,
    so Bob made a deal
    Bob has to squeal for his meals.
    Bob says
    "it is better to be a dealer
    who squeals
    than it is to be
    a meal
    on a wheel."

    And now

    The itsy bitsy spiders
    have started their own zoo.
    They have cats and dogs
    and birds and frogs.
    They even captured a girl
    wearing clogs.
    The itsy bitsy spiders named her
    Sally from the ally.

    If I failed to mention
    Sally from the ally
    should have paid
    attention.
    You see
    Sally from the ally was an unwary girl.
    Here is how her story unfurls.

    Sally from the ally was at the end of her whits.
    Sally from the ally's clogs just did not fit.
    Sally from the ally should have bought better shoes.
    Sally from the ally just did not know what to do.
    Sally from the ally took a seat,
    on a box she sat.
    How neat,
    you can maybe guess the next part.
    along came a spider and sat down beside her.
    I think the spiders name is Art.
    Just about the time Sally from the ally
    looked at Art.
    A bunch of Art's itsy bitsy friends came out to play.
    Yup,
    Sally from the ally should have paid attention.
    She was an unwary girl.

    There where spiders on the front
    There where spiders in the back
    There where spiders on the sides
    Sally from the ally was looking like
    an itsy bitsy spider's snack.
    If only poor
    Sally from the ally could have known.
    She screamed and ran for the closest door
    No!
    Sally from the ally, not that door!
    That
    is my door
    and
    my home is not my own.
    I no longer live alone.
    There are spiders inside her.

    To be fair
    the itsy bitsy spiders
    offered Sally from the ally
    the squealer deal.
    However Sally from the ally
    was just a screamer
    and it turns out
    a night mare dreamer.

    Boo hoo
    what to do,
    The itsy bitsy spiders ate
    poor
    Sally
    from the ally
    and I think
    soon
    they will be coming after you.

    O
    me?
    I
    sit in my chair
    and stare
    and stare
    the itsy bitsy spiders
    are
    everywhere.





    Submitted on 2011-01-09 09:02:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cute, but reminiscent of either the DTs or just some fine stand-alone hallucinations in a cut sort of way. More entertaining than scary. I always appreciate a good rhyme.
    | Posted on 2011-01-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      First off, can I say... that picture scares me just a little bit. I'm not even arachnophobic or anything :S

    Is it weird to say that while reading this, I had the tune of "Itsy Bitsy Spider" in my head?

    I like the rhyme in the second stanza, when Bob is talking. It reminds me of a simple/childish nursery rhyme speak, y'know?

    In the second stanza, I think the line:

    "Bob hast to squeals for his meals."

    Should be:

    "Bob has to squeal for his meals."

    But those were probably only typos...?

    Sometimes the rhymth feels off, but that's probably because my head is trying very hard not to sing to this poem.

    "They have cats and dogs
    and birds and frogs.
    They even captured a girl
    wearing clogs."

    Like somewhere in there, I think it gets a bit uneven, but like I said, 'trying desperately to not put a tune to this poem.'


    Anyway, this is a strange little epidemic (?) of a spider invasion. I mean, a spider zoo!? I think some people would be scared after that. Anyway, this is a creative, 'fun' [for the spiders] little piece.

    Thanks for sharing! (:

    --Esha
    | Posted on 2011-01-09 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]


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