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Looking Back


Author: Dead Bell
ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48 /129 /125
Words: 100
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Looking Back


In this same room
I have praised before
Its, often warm, solutions.
Pined remembrances

Now ill here;
Five days bed-loitering
With ocean silence ringing ears
And new years cold sun
Gathering birds

A large gull flew
Through Venetian.
Flew
In frames and
Out of view and
Over roofs

Will I get there?
Will I pass this sickness of rooms?

To where I can hide again
For an hour or two
In the corner of a dusky green,
Our youth clamorously burnt ,
And keep old flames
Quietly burning out the night




Submitted on 2011-01-09 14:25:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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