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    Author: MidnightSun89
    ASL Info:    21/M/N.M
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 63/31/27
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 435
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       "Night has ways to heal the soul" - Rumi


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    With both wings broken, an angel made of dust came up out of a quaking sea.

    At the oceans edge, by living water, and a moon far wandering up in the arc of the sky, she wrote:

    The taste and touch of stone are what all I’ve come to know. Wandering deep into the keep of love.

    In a cave of water love opened my chest and took my heart and buried it. And for years I’ve wandered the dungeons.

    I thought maybe I had died and this was hell, that I would wander these black caves forever. Searching for that part of me that I’ve learned to forgive.

    Then in a stone room I gave up. I laid down listening to the dark, it was then that I heard it, it was my beating heart. And then I fell away.

    She got up from her knees in the sand.

    My eyes are gone forever, she said. Then she fell away to just a breath of her former self, and passed like an apparition into the wind.




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