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    dots Submission Name: Dear Loverdots
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    Author: AshleyDYoung
    ASL Info:    19/F/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 28/33/34
    Words: 296
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 650
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1679



    Description:
       This is a Ballad format, now if it sounds rough I'm sorry but it was forced poetry. I'm trying to fit certain styles. Enjoy and leave feedback please


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    dotsDear Loverdots
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    Dear Lover,

    Here I am, writing to you again,
    wishing I were home in your loving embrace;
    this war is far from ending, but the journey is almost over,
    its not much longer now till I caress your beautiful face.

    Dear Darling,

    Your letter was received not a moment too late,
    I'm missing you every moment, and worried every day.
    I wish you were here in my arms tonight as I lay my
    head to rest, but your so very far far away.

    Dear Lover,

    I know that its hard on you to be so alone,
    but babe remember I'm fighting for you.
    It is for you that I pick my sword and shield,
    oh and babe, I love you.

    Dear Darling,

    I love you too, and I understand
    why your not here, and why you fight,
    That doesn't mean I have to like it,
    I cant stand going to bed alone every night.

    To The Wife Of...

    We are sad to say that today your husband
    is gone, he wanted us to give you this, his last letter.
    We tried everything we could Mrs. but it was no matter,
    he never seemed to get any better .

    Dear Lover,

    Seems I wont be coming home tonight,
    but babe I'm there with you now, always around.
    Every time you feel the brush of the wind against
    your face, or hear an abnormal sound.

    I love you my dear, and I will be waiting
    for you to once again stand by my side.
    I'm sorry I did not make it home,
    I promise to you that I tried.





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      Somehow I knew this would be a tear jerker.
    | Posted on 2011-01-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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