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    dots Submission Name: Materialize dots

    Author: AshleyDYoung
    ASL Info:    19/F/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 28/33/34
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       this poem was written in a pantoum format :)

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    dotsMaterialize dots

    Butterflies flutter, materialize
    on their wings i arise,
    welcoming my destiny, surmised;
    with no regret only surprise.

    on their wings i arise
    I close my tired eyes
    with no regret only surprise
    into heaven without guise

    I close my tired eyes
    I tell the world, I never loved bye-byes .
    into heaven without guise
    nothing around me to up-rise.

    I tell the world, I never loved bye-byes .
    This was my pact, my compromise
    nothing around me to up-rise.
    Think of it as a birth, not demise.

    This was my pact, my compromise

    Submitted on 2011-01-10 20:39:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is some type of growth-transformation poem.

    The title is referring to a personal event, passing off, a finding. encounter, happening in great deal.

    Almost like the theme was to express it as if you were at a turning point with more opening into promising conclusion than closure of any kind.

    At least that what I thought of it, altering.
    | Posted on 2011-04-13 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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