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    dots Submission Name: Oncedots
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    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 638
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 606



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    dotsOncedots
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    Once my reason to smile
    Now the reason I cry
    Once the reason I lived
    Now the reason I'm dying

    What am I holding onto
    Should I just fail
    Give up the struggle
    Or stay and continue to fight
    I am not getting a reaction
    I am fighting a loosing battle

    I want to win
    I want to stand on solid ground
    I want to be your lover
    I want to prove you can trust me
    I want to be happy again

    A fighting chance at winning back our love
    We once shared and the magic that still lingers




    Submitted on 2011-01-11 00:35:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this poem, it actually describes what I once had...
    and all is lost, but the lost is still near,
    and always believe that...
    | Posted on 2011-01-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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