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    dots Submission Name: Dyin' Bluesdots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 29/75/68
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Death
    Total Views: 602
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1057



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       Blues baby!


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    dotsDyin' Bluesdots
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    A man came around Bout half hour ago
    Left me with nothin but a smokin' hole.
    Don't remember what I did
    Maybe somethin' I said.
    But that matters no more.
    I've Been bleedin'
    And I've been thinkin'
    About nothin' but you.
    Ooooohooohooohoooooohoh
    I've got the dyin' blues.
    Been watchin' blood fall to the floor
    And I couldn't help
    But think of you more.
    Ooooohooohooohoooooohoh
    I've got the dyin' blues.
    I watch as I breathe
    A simple fading steam
    And as it starts to disappear
    I feel a creepin' fear
    And know it will be only moments
    Before I. am. No. Looooonger here.
    So, I've been bleedin'
    And I've been thinkin'
    Bout' nothin but you.
    Ooooohooohooohoooooohoh
    I've got them dyin' blues...

    Finfinfin
    End
    -eggshells-







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      Heck, anything "blues" is cool by definition. Dyin' blues has to be the ultimate "blues" and of course we had to put in a woman in the picture somewhere. Now for a smokey room and some whiskey...
    | Posted on 2011-01-11 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      but if I recover
    from the displeasure of a lover
    I'll tan my wounds at the beach
    with a kevlar towel in reach

    Just something. ;)
    | Posted on 2011-01-11 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      There something lyrical and rhythmical in your words and the way they flow with each other. You give me the dyin' blues which is exactly what you should be giving me. If I have such feelings only by reading your work, then you've done marvelously well.

    Cheers,

    Charmedidentity
    | Posted on 2011-01-11 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the blues. not sure why really, because sometimes they are just so sad. it's not that i relish sadness, but moreso the fact that the blues are a feeling music. soulful. lived in.

    i like this because i can imagine how the music might sound. it's simple too as well as relatable.

    anyhoos...

    just some unspecifieds.
    | Posted on 2011-01-11 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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