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    Author: MaxHam
    ASL Info:    20/m/NH USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 60/131/105
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 500
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 787



    Description:
       just some random thoughts pouring together to create a potential song


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    synical yellow little tabs
    coming over me like ever-ything else
    binding golden bands
    flowing through life like ever-ything else

    expression dies with me
    constant green burdens killing all the brains
    why cant you see
    that i am like ever-ybody else?

    Don't try to look at me
    Why do you even care?
    Who are you anyway?
    It's all too much to bare

    Nothingness is fond of me
    Its time for you to go
    I can't figure out myself
    Its time to start the show

    ......The show of life

    synical yellow little tabs
    coming over me like ever-ything else
    binding golden bands
    flowing through life like ever-ything else.




    Submitted on 2011-01-11 10:47:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey this was a cool write an untitled piece alwaz opens the door to imagination
    well done

    sandman
    | Posted on 2011-01-12 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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