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    dots Submission Name: Love in an instantdots

    Author: TollundMan
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/2/2
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsLove in an instantdots

    Night-clubbed eyes wander.
    Unconsciously they stumbled into
    A pair that showed
    Shadowed lines
    Too bleak for sadness

    My stare had followed
    Through to some point in her soul
    And I sat – still – honed my memories

    Grace definitely followed her
    Sad promenade
    In her straight fringe
    The black hair
    Doming her weighted eyes

    Took her seat at an angle to me
    A mathematic test
    Or for limbs in my neck to
    Turn and view her

    Surely I did and I did
    But looked with no intent
    Only sure acknowledgement

    Lights frantic and beat thumping
    Lost to a passionate threshold

    Peace travelled between us
    For seconds
    I forgot – everything
    We had been through it all;
    Shy glances, the court, love made and finally parting

    And like a red hot poker
    Tipping a thread
    It softly fell into our laps.
    Nothing consolable about it

    I searched no further for anything

    That fulfilment came
    To no avail

    Submitted on 2011-01-11 16:21:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh the irony, am i right?
    But I still think the distance between 'those two' is still just holding back.
    That this love isn't just another failed accomplishment from what i see, it's just a accomplishment that's been in ruins.
    | Posted on 2011-01-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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