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    dots Submission Name: The candledots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe candledots
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    It has dug its own altar
    In it’s wax earth
    Before I even light it

    The wick is black and bent
    Burned but still suffering
    Head-low with the heavy expectation of flames

    No wonder it curls;
    The flame goes up
    Strict but full of loose tension

    The wick eye shows an ember tear
    The flame rises uncaring of limits;
    Fire takes the most chances.

    It sways with the motion of my thoughts
    And like that could eat them.
    I lean in-

    What thoughts has it already taken?
    I lean in-
    What faces?







    Submitted on 2011-01-12 14:31:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my mind is black and bent, but new thoughts flame and rise as high as they want to...even as i suffer the pain again and again...

    candles are resilient until the wax is totally used up...the heart is resilient too..but perhaps sooner or later, it too is used up...

    so while it lives...it must jump to the sky as high as it can...know no bounds....

    cool piece.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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