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    dots Submission Name: I blame Elvis!dots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsI blame Elvis!dots

    My sweet baby doll you was in bed just a crying
    instead of coming on down to the courthouse
    to alibi me, nor to set me free by lying.
    you never came to clear my name,
    you just stayed in that bed and wailed.
    you never even showed up to pay my bail.

    Honey I want money just as much as you do.
    That is why
    I was at Freddie's sniffing that glue dew.
    Baskin Robins and knockin'
    Mr. Hobbin's on the noggin .

    Was all part of the plan we ran
    threw with Dan
    you know
    Right before
    you left
    to get those front seat tickets
    to the Elvis show.
    You where waiting in line
    everything was fine.
    Then you got the news
    on the wire
    it was dire
    Elvis Expired!

    I looked for you
    I looked for the car.
    (you drove straight to the bar)
    I was disgusted.
    I got busted.
    I went to jail.
    You got drunk at the bar.
    Your house was not far.
    You stayed in bed and cried.
    You could have come and lied.

    Elvis is with the angels singing in the choir.
    That is why - I sit by - this dumpster
    warming my hands near the fire.
    Elvis went to his honored seat in heaven,
    while I, well I, got bent and was sent - to jail.

    Submitted on 2011-01-12 18:55:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      " i got bent" damn sounds like something my cousin from jersey would say...

    okay where to start with this one...

    early on i'm hearing "jailhouse rock" in the background...
    in the middle i'm hearing "don't cry daddy" crossed with "in the ghetto" and then kind of a "you saw me crying in the chapel" at the end..

    and here i am ...a bum on the street because my life isn't worth a damn..oh why didn't i go instead of Elvis..
    he's dead and at peace...finally..i'm just dead screwed.

    might change to "the plan we ran through with dan"
    "you were waiting in line"

    but this is really clever...and...it really is sad..

    because it is so true...sometimes we are so into people we don't even know..celebrities...we forget about the people we actually live with, see every day, know.

    | Posted on 2011-03-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL! I like this, it's witty and slanted sideways, like one of those fun houses that is anti-gravity? Yes... those kind.
    | Posted on 2011-01-13 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]

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