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Submission Name: Spirit Messengers dots

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Author:	lebeauvide
ASL Info:	24/F
Elite Ratio:	2.29 - 75/295/165
Words:	29

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	385
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	187

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Spirit Messengers dots

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I dream of birds in flight
And they often tell me of the future
Messengers of the night
They whisper, and tell me

"Do not be afraid."

Submitted on 2011-01-13 02:44:25 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i feel as if this poem needs a departure from what might be expected, otherwise it is straightforward, an object of prettiness that one might lose in a room.

(in the way that teens are prone to overdecorate)

I dream of birds in flight
And they - telling me....

abbreviated edit denotes departure point.

an openonion no less, no more.

| Posted on 2011-01-14 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
i really like this. maybe because i am a bird watcher/observer/listener.

i love the ending here, because for myself at least, i feel birds have something to say/tell me, and it usually has a calming effect.

i would edit the quotes here.
ES has a way of buggering up word imports.

anyhoo. nice job.
| Posted on 2011-01-13 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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