The Elaborate Ebony Swan by SammySueYou

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Submission Name: The Elaborate Ebony Swan dots

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Author:	SammySueYou
ASL Info:	23/f/nm
Elite Ratio:	3.05 - 90/78/30
Words:	149

Class/Type:	Poetry/Broken
Total Views:	572
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	892

Description:
The rhythm is way off, but I thought I would share it anyways. I wrote it after I watched the Black Swan, so thats why I named it

The Elaborate Ebony Swan dots

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I have been split into two
versions of one whole,
a garden variety angel
and a demon without a soul.
I can no longer gaze into a mirror
without seeing the crack,
a part of me shines white,
and the other so black.
I touch the reflection to see
if I can fix whats been broken,
one side so warm, one side so cold,
but neither has yet spoken.
When I am sad the dark shadow
takes me over without much fight,
I watch from inside this body
unable to move or scream out in fright.
When my dark side recoils
it leaves me with regret,
Its like a waking nightmare
jumping up in cold sweat.
Maybe one day when I look
at my reflection the crack will be gone,
I will no longer be a slave
to the dark side, I will no longer
....be a pawn.

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  If only dark had much more sympathy, the world wouldn't be so bad right now, now would it?
Trust me, the darkness has much more power than the light and sooner or later, the light will give out just like a candle.
>;)

Love of hatred,
Cici
| Posted on 2011-01-14 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
  i like the idea of dark and light, except im always more drawn to the dark side :) good write
| Posted on 2011-01-13 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  Very nice work. Light and darkness, darkness and light, how we are so stuck in between the two. I'm not a preacher, I'm a poet, read some of my poetry and see if it can shed some light on the subject.

Love of Christ,
Christie
| Posted on 2011-01-13 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
  hi i really like this if this statement is true it never goes away the dark side only gets deeper with each passing day the light side will shine brighter in its time to
the key to all of this is to have someone to watch over you

if you remember this as you age you will no what i mean

great write

sandman
| Posted on 2011-01-13 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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