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    dots Submission Name: the good byedots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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       i wrote this a LONG time ago. finally found it, now its here. enjoy.


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    dotsthe good byedots
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    Have i failed as a follower?
    Have i failed as a friend?
    As much as i hate it
    the answer is simply "yes"

    I've no contro; over my life.
    I follow orders when they are given
    Its harsh to say it like that...
    But it is what it is in the end.

    Im sorry... for everything!
    I was just an obstacle in the way.
    The tension showed when i was around,
    which proved i only ruined the day...

    The candle burns ever so brightly
    but the wax melts quite fast...
    I only hope you find and read this,
    ...long after the day i pass

    funny, when your on the verge of dying
    and you keep it a secret
    appologies and good byes are endless.
    Im sorry that i wasnt a better friend.




    Submitted on 2011-01-13 19:55:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You might have failed as a friend or a follower, you didnt do it deliberately... we are all fallible but very rarely someone gets up and admits that he was at fault.

    Bravo!
    | Posted on 2011-02-21 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


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