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    dots Submission Name: To my daughter (1/1/11)dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 852
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 594



    Description:
       Holly Jean Maria Elizabeth Vrolyks was born on 1/1/11 at 8:45am. She weighed 6lbs and 14oz. She was 20inches long and has redhair with big blue eyes.


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    dotsTo my daughter (1/1/11)dots
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    With hair like the sun
    and eyes blue like the sky
    with skin like snow
    and heart born to fly

    I can't grasp that you belong to me
    or how my life has changed
    You became all I have
    and all that remains

    Holly, you are prefect,
    the prefect little girl.
    there is nothing I can't get for you
    even if you want the world.

    You have me at your tiny fingertips
    you can make the whole world bow
    I can't believe you are mine forever
    and that's all I want now.




    Submitted on 2011-01-14 17:53:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi theres nothing more beautiful than the birth of a child i have expierenced it 5 times and 4 grandbabies i alwaz remember the days they were born
    congratulations and all the best

    sandman
    | Posted on 2011-01-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwe! I don't even know her and I've fallen in love! As an aunt to more than 9 nieces and nephews, I adore children. :)
    Congrats!
    -Cici
    | Posted on 2011-01-15 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful! congrats on your babygirl!
    | Posted on 2011-01-15 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Love it, poe
    | Posted on 2011-01-15 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Congratulations! What a beautiful little girl!

    Your work is getting better and better; your attention to meter and rhyme is improving with every write, and this one is very special. It will be among the lifetime keepsakes that will be precious to this little lady and to you, now and in years to come!
    | Posted on 2011-01-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      i LOVED IT!!! more!!
    | Posted on 2011-01-14 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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