How peaceful and serene. While most people would write about storms and mighty tsunamis, you choose to portray the soft side of Mother Nature while lying on the beach. A picture on the wall of my mind painted by this poem cries for acclaim within the community. You have done this one well.
the start of a beautiful picture is perhaps in the making, though im not sure, no, yes... like i said in my comments to caspian, feeling obliged or beating out a style can in some cases be a restriction. in this case i think it is..... i dont want to beatrepeatbeatrepeat,,,,,the words you write paint pretty pictures in peoples hesds,,,,,but your shortcomings are certainly not what you write here....see below comments,,,,,it is what you do not write. you give the reader an image then you steal it back, thats mine give it the [censored] back, but you said i could have it,,,,,tough. [censored] off..... so i will www.on1eday.co.uk while you make pretty speaches, im being cut to shreds...