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    dots Submission Name: The Magic Elfin Treedots

    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 361
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Another one from year 7... we had to write a ballad. So I wrote one about a tree. o_O Bash it, whatever. I was eleven and a bit trippeh. ._.

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    dotsThe Magic Elfin Treedots

    (WARNING: Please read the 'description' it will explain a lot!)

    It stood there proud and magnificent
    The ground around it covered in moss
    Strong, tall and definitely beautiful
    The magic Elfin Tree was like a boss.

    June was a small little girl,
    Small she was, but indeed strong
    June was as solid as a rock
    There was nothing she did wrong.

    Walking through the woods one day
    June came across
    a big shadowy figure,
    the ground around it covered in moss.

    June exclaimed a cry of surprise
    as she realised what she had seen.
    It was the magic Elfin Tree!
    And from every branch grew a jellybean!

    "Come and be my friend!"
    said the tree.
    June looked at the tree with such happiness
    "Friends with a talking tree! Imagine all the fun there'll be!"

    They stood there proud and beautiful
    Human and a tree
    How many adventures did they share?
    One or two, maybe more than three!

    The terrible knob of fate had turned,
    June grew up, you see
    The tree was only aging.
    Was it no longer human and tree?

    Many years had passed
    June, walking through the woods to see
    A very special friend of hers-
    The magic Elfin Tree!

    "Hello my friend June!"
    exclaimed the tree
    "Are you glad I came to see you?"
    Said June to the old tree.

    The Tree and June were happy to be
    a friend and friend for the rest of their lives
    So many things in common!
    (apart from the fact June hated chives)

    June was never a 'tree-hugger'
    But in this case she made an exception.
    She squeezed the tree lovingly tight.
    Instead of a tree she was hugging, it was perfection.

    In the Tree's place stood a man
    He was very handsome to look at
    Crystal eyes, perfect features
    Loving every animal, including the little bat.

    He got down
    balancing on his knee
    Staring into June's eyes.
    "Will you marry me?"

    June taken aback
    looked at the 'once-was-a-tree'
    Gazing at him with such happiness
    "Married to a talking tree! Imagine how happy I'd be!"

    Submitted on 2011-01-18 00:05:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Cute and quite enjoyable to read. Thanks!
    | Posted on 2011-06-18 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      A classical ballad has an alternating four three beat. However deviation is allowed. Now as much as I like this
    I was hoping for more than one poem after all I was on the road for five days does that not mean I should be seeing five poems from you? OK back to the poem are u sure u want to marry a tree that produces jelly beans?
    Think of all the time u will spend on the stairmaster unless u want a jellybean belly?
    | Posted on 2011-01-22 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Whimsical and merry! This threw a smile on my face! :D Hahahaha! I loved every part of it! o.O Who could bash such a pretty piece of mastery?!? You rawck dood! xD
    | Posted on 2011-01-21 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]

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