Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: The Song of Raindots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: mugsy
    ASL Info:    68/M/Sooke/ B.C./Can.
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 138/106/35
    Words: 22
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 447
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 178



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Song of Raindots
    -------------------------------------------


    An ancient rhythm
    Older than time,
    Ethereal----Like the
    whisper stars make
    Late at night
    As they move through
    the boundless cosmos.....




    Submitted on 2011-01-18 00:06:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Yes, I agree with joeyalphabet, the imagery is great, and it does feel unfinished, you really should continue it.

    -Kali
    | Posted on 2011-01-23 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      You do a great job with this. Love the imagery you create here, especially lines 3-4. But this feels unfinished - think you should continue it.
    | Posted on 2011-01-20 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, Mugsy, you take me to a quiet, restful place that I no longer enjoy in my present living. It's nice to remember it is still there and that I can have it if I want it. But for now, obligations hold me back.
    | Posted on 2011-01-19 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    188857

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Live In Between written by teika5
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    The Abyss of Love written by poetotoe
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry