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    dots Submission Name: The Song of Raindots
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    Author: mugsy
    ASL Info:    68/M/Sooke/ B.C./Can.
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 138/106/35
    Words: 22
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsThe Song of Raindots
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    An ancient rhythm
    Older than time,
    Ethereal----Like the
    whisper stars make
    Late at night
    As they move through
    the boundless cosmos.....




    Submitted on 2011-01-18 00:06:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes, I agree with joeyalphabet, the imagery is great, and it does feel unfinished, you really should continue it.

    -Kali
    | Posted on 2011-01-23 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      You do a great job with this. Love the imagery you create here, especially lines 3-4. But this feels unfinished - think you should continue it.
    | Posted on 2011-01-20 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, Mugsy, you take me to a quiet, restful place that I no longer enjoy in my present living. It's nice to remember it is still there and that I can have it if I want it. But for now, obligations hold me back.
    | Posted on 2011-01-19 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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