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    dots Submission Name: conversations #2dots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #2dots

    i've been dreaming again of being

    above or(beneath my unknown

    sense of being) a top some

    mountain far from here

    (there is this underlying

    sense) beyond anywhere

    i've ever been, dreaming

    (that i know absolutely nothing

    of love or passion)

    of you and how i've never

    met you (or anything

    remotely human at all)

    i stare at birds

    for so long (sometimes after

    the wind of life has left me)

    expecting their trajectories

    to somehow explain (breathing

    or breathless or something)

    the course of my own life

    (along those lines)

    throughout these years.

    and what if we never

    meet (having no longitude

    or latitude) and we spend the moments

    we have left (right or

    left) alone and mistaken (up

    or down) until we finally perish

    (without any direction at all)

    still young enough to remember

    nothing (beneath the coldness of the earth)

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      I'm new, so I hope I'm doing this right. Your poem is the first one I clicked on & I hope that there are more like this, in quality & subject. This reads like an inner-conversation, one I think I've had while attempting meditation. All those thoughts of what is, what isn't and what could be. The idea of reaching and not reaching some sort of enlightenment. They can be very heavy lines to think along. It's in this wandering, wondering way that you explore the idea of the tangible & intangible aspects of being becoming one, but also the possibility of not achieving this. It also reads like a longing love poem, lovers to be reunited (I like to think my body and soul are lovers). It's important to keep searching & searching & searching, even when it gets tiresome & you could really use a destination & reassurance. Best to just let go, be directionless, really be it. I also enjoyed the different natural qualities you brought in to it, like watching the birds for answers. Plenty can be learned from what's beyond concrete & buildings, you just have to look. I guess it can put a strain on the eyes sometimes though, trying to see meaning.

    Stay warm. There was something about critiquing, but not a thing to critique in mine eyes.
    | Posted on 2011-01-19 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]

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