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    dots Submission Name: Sundowndots
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    Author: metallichick786
    ASL Info:    26/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78/85/51
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsSundowndots
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    Yesterday I cried
    it left me bleeding
    I grew inside your sunrise

    tomorrow's all unknown
    beyond my believing
    I can feel my hope die

    Losing all I know
    I feel so hollow
    suspended in his compromise

    Illusions of the light
    will keep me waiting
    somehow till sundown

    As reality clouds my eyes
    your rays are fading
    I move into your beams light

    The sound of your voice
    will keep me waiting
    A love gone for so long

    This night ending
    is the proof of time
    killing all the faith I know

    And as the sun paints the sky
    with colors all too bright
    I see the world become night

    As the sun dies
    So shall I
    for I have lost my light






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      this was a little bit depressing, but in a good way. if that makes sense. you were able to capture the emotions of a lost love so well that i was also able to feel it with every word i read.
    | Posted on 2011-01-19 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so sad, but is well done. A love lost is like the blackness of night, where it is hard to notice any brightness and where one's dark mood shuts out the Sun's rays.

    | Posted on 2011-01-18 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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