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    dots Submission Name: conversations #4dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 273
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    dotsconversations #4dots
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    although the absence

    of spring (somehow)



    compels me (meandering

    onward) past the constant



    rain (and in drunkeness, i

    move on) in solitude



    (through the night)

    despite myself,



    (until morning)

    i will always



    have this, (a beautiful

    way) that my heart



    is a cell

    (of loving everything)



    that has its own weather

    (that is) always (beautiful)

    .




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    Okay, so I am new here & this might sound stupid but isn't that +FAV button up there supposed to coincide with "Recent Favorites" thing on my page? I wanted to add this to that, but it won't let me, rather than leave a comment because I don't really want to comment on this poem. I just want to read it & then reread it because I appreciate everything that it says & every element that you chose to use. Beginning, end & middle. Which makes for a not-very-good comment because detailed comments are wanted & all that jazz, which I'm completely for, but I don't feel the pressing need to discuss this piece. It is. & I wanted to keep it even though it's not mine.
    | Posted on 2011-01-21 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]


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