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    dots Submission Name: Slowly hatingdots
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    Author: Di Re Rakord
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 130/125/30
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsSlowly hatingdots
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    I keep falling in love with girls he treats like shit, I keep having to hold back on my violent fits. I want to shout and scream of decay, I want to put an end to this day.

    This pain in my heart has left my soul awry,
    the silence you hold has left me to die.
    You say that you love me you say that you care, but where are you at when im bleeding out swears?

    I hope you dont laugh cause its no laughing matter, my mind it urges for your jaw to me shatter. Maybe then you can be rid of all your lies, maybe then i wont want to rip out your eyes.




    Submitted on 2011-01-20 21:14:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's super good, I love the way it expresses the anger in his/her emotions. And I love it most of all because I can relate. Good piece. :)
    | Posted on 2011-01-21 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      whoa, the anger is just pouring out of this piece.. i like it :) i find its alot easier to be mad at someone then actually having to explain why your mad, good write.
    | Posted on 2011-01-21 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      wow you or the person you wrote this for sounds like they are very upset be subtle be wise all good things will happen in their own time

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    | Posted on 2011-01-21 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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