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    dots Submission Name: Not sure what to name itdots
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    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 804
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 874



    Description:
       random thoughts thrown together


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    dotsNot sure what to name itdots
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    The first time you said hi was sweet
    the first time you touched me was magical
    the first time you kissed me gave me butterflies
    the first time you said I love you brought tears

    Then something changed
    You said goodbye out of nowhere
    The touches were rough
    The kisses stopped happening
    I never heard I love you anymore

    I tried to talk you wouldn't listen
    Just kept pushing me away
    So I stopped trying
    and that's when you walked out

    Now here we are face to face
    Its been years since we have spoken
    You are in the arms of another woman
    I am in the arms of another man

    Yet I'm filled with so many questions
    what went wrong to make it end
    Whose to blame in all this
    Answers we may never know




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      gosh i can def say i have been there before, it was a longggg time ago but basically the same thing happened, except i fell inlove with him all over again when i saw him. now i can look back and smile over what we had, i hope you can do the same thing one day.
    | Posted on 2011-01-24 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      General Advice
    Buy stocks and real estate
    while your young.

    Now as for the write it seems
    some of these feeling were one
    sided. I understand through reading
    and hearsay that be it a man or
    women they may act committed until
    greener pastures present themselves.
    Which makes me wonder did he leave
    for another women?
    Or did he just leave?
    If this other women appeared right after the
    breakup you have an answer.
    If not you will have to ask him or
    a friend of his who might know.

    However if you are happy now I would
    not push it. Just be content.
    | Posted on 2011-01-23 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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