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    dots Submission Name: Dragon's Breath dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Bytes: 371



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       Triolet


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    dotsDragon's Breath dots
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    A dragon's breath burns livid fire
    And burning meals are just the thing
    Consuming flesh his one desire
    A dragon's breath burns livid fire
    To taste a virgin will inspire
    A dragon's heart to make it sing
    A dragon's breath burns livid fire
    And burning meals are just the thing




    Submitted on 2011-01-22 04:40:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A hungry dragon for me always attacks on instinct and not on desire.
    | Posted on 2012-10-22 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      I have never tried a triolet and admire a successful one immensely. I am a fan of dragons.
    The word 'sweet' seems to disrupt the meter. Aren't virgins 'sweet' anyways, so really it's redundant. That's my only current nit.~chris
    | Posted on 2011-02-02 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      
    I think this is the first formal poem I have read on here. There is plenty of rhyming & lyric-like stuff going on, but not much traditional, form poetry. So this is a neat surprise! & all in all it's well done & gives that feeling of going in circles that triolets tend to do. They have a hypnotic effect I think. I also like that it's playful, being about hungry dragons craving sweet maidens while also keeping a sort of historical premise in there. "Consuming flesh his one desire" is a bit odd on the tongue, but otherwise, nothing to critique.
    | Posted on 2011-01-22 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]


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