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    dots Submission Name: What happens now?dots
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    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
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    dotsWhat happens now?dots
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    You looked into my eyes with wonder and questions You wondered if I loved you back if I felt everything you felt...You were afraid that I would reject you...You were afraid to feel what it really felt like to be in love...For so long you were stuck being with someone you no longer really loved...then I came along and changed your world...I made you want to smile again I filled your days with hope filled your nights with dreams...Then you asked me one night how I felt about you...I looked at you and told you I loved you...You meant everything to me...You were what made me happy...Everything you wanted and needed to hear...Yet were both scared to make that next move...So afraid of losing what neither one of us ever has had...For once we should both just do what we need to do...I need to be with you just as you need to be with me...lets forget what the world says and just life in the moment...what you say...Take my hand and lets begin our future...




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      This encapsulates every thought and feeling I've had for the last 2 weeks. Ever since I started a long distance relationship with the man of my dreams, I've worried countless times over silly things... Like, what if he doesn't like me, or my body. mostly I worry about him not liking my body... I hate my body! So yeah, I worry and I fret. But I don't know... I feel this poem. It's, in every way, what I feel... I'm scared of him rejecting me. I'm scared of him regretting it all. I'm just plain scared... *sigh*

    -Sharon-
    | Posted on 2011-01-23 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]


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