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    dots Submission Name: Beautiful Pearlsdots
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    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 316
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 541
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2284



    Description:
       Part of my "Stuff we had to do in year 7" collection.
    We had to rewrite lyrics to a song. I chose a song which was very popular at the time, "Beautiful Girl" by Sean Kingston (IKR I don't listen to that kinda music anymore, haha).
    So here is what my 11yo self came up with. Feel free to bash and call me names.

    Original song:



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    dotsBeautiful Pearlsdots
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    The 'Description Box' will explain everything etc...

    Chorus:
    Look mum, I want that pearl!
    "But that'll mean I'll have to work."
    We'll both feel suicidal, suicidal.
    Stupid to worry over
    Then there's that other pearl...
    It's too cheap for you to work
    "I'll still feel suicidal, suicidal."
    Besides, I need to feed Rover!

    Verse 1:
    I was walking in the park
    Trying to sing like a lark
    Lookin' at some art
    Tryin' to play the part
    Coz I really thought
    that jewels last forever (last forever)
    You say I'm too young
    To around my neck have precious jewels strung
    But with a proud air
    I said I didn't care
    Oh, but the feeling won't last any longer. (any longer)

    Refrain:
    See they're very fine, nice pearls
    Some of a kind
    They're all on my mind
    But my mummy declined
    Oh dear...
    I think she's going crazy!

    Chorus! (see above)

    Verse 2:
    It was only dollars ninety-nine
    With a lov-er-ly shine (yeah)
    When I look away
    In me head it goes astray
    And all that I thought
    That pearls drove a girl crazy (crazy)
    And so I came about
    Thinking North and South
    My life with these pearls
    The best in the world
    Fake they turned out to be
    No, they weren't the pearls for me (for me)

    Refrain and Chorus! (see above)

    Bridge/Verse 3:
    See I'm sad and fussin'
    Fake pearls not worth fightin'
    Can someone tell me why
    I took those pearls a liking
    Can't believe those pearls are ones I know
    They could look better (better)
    Now I look 'em with me eyes
    I see terrible lies
    Oh I'll never believe
    What I saw first without real eyes
    Mother saw 'em too
    But wait, she's too clever (too clever).

    Those pearls weren't beautiful
    Although my mummy never worked
    We both feel suicidal, suicidal, suicidal...




    Submitted on 2011-01-23 18:46:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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