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    dots Submission Name: conversations #6dots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #6dots

    she lives (somewhere)

    far away (nearby,)

    from here, (on stilts)

    but i'm not sure

    if that's just a feeling

    (above the city,)

    that i have

    (towering over everything)

    on cold nights

    (like a skyscraper.)

    when i'm by myself

    or if (someday) i'm merely

    reaching (when everything

    collapses) for something

    instead (into heaps

    of forgotten debris)

    of understanding

    that(she will still be there)

    being alone(like the last

    goddess) is its own

    virtue. (of winter.)

    Submitted on 2011-01-25 18:10:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have two different poems in one, that is really cool. They both have different meanings. I've never seen anyone write in this type of style. I enjoyed it.
    Love of Christ,
    | Posted on 2011-01-26 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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