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    dots Submission Name: conversations #9dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #9dots
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    i keep expecting to see you

    slinking about (with rose hips

    around) the dirty street corner



    with (bird feathers

    like) bruised knees,

    looking for me under (soft kisses



    and) every rock that you pass.

    (the poisoned petals

    of lost flowers.)



    but instead, (you're always lost

    in a daydream or) a nightmare

    keeps you hiding



    (just out of sight)

    from the world.

    (and i can never find you.)




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