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    dots Submission Name: conversations #10dots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #10dots

    belief in anything (fragile)

    is a belief in (feathers)

    unknown things (fall

    apart) as lovely

    (as bad weather moves in)

    as you (frequently)

    are beautiful

    (collapsing buildings) forever.

    if only i had met you

    (everywhere) before now,

    (in a path) when i was younger

    and (destroying everything)

    more likely to love you. (completely)

    Submitted on 2011-01-25 18:15:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I specifically like the duality of this one. They are all poems within poems, these conversations, but this one reads even more like parallel lines, never to intersect & if only they had, then maybe...maybe...

    It is the "maybe" feeling of this, the sorta "if only" that makes it soft in its unknowing but also sad. I have often wondered what certain things would have been like if only I had met this person early or later or not at all.

    I also like that the parenthesized part almost seem to admit the truth that the other part of the poem couldn't quite bring itself to. It's just an incredible affect.
    | Posted on 2011-01-27 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]

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