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    dots Submission Name: Bra Humor...dots
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    Author: was_i_ever_real
    ASL Info:    23 _ f _ tx
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 194/91/52
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       An attempt to escape writers block.


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    dotsBra Humor...dots
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    One thing that annoys me
    is that I can stay up all night
    after working a 9 hour shift
    at my dead end job,
    after going out to breakfast
    at midnight with my guy
    and arguing the whole time
    about how I actually really
    am crazy,
    after sitting on my couch
    with my laptop
    reading the poetry of someone
    who may or may not actually exist
    as the person he portrays
    himself to be...
    and right when I decide
    to crawl into bed,
    pull the covers over me,
    with one leg sticking out,
    my arms wrapped around my
    favorite Teddy,
    That's the moment
    I remember
    that I'm still wearing my bra...

    and no matter how hard I try
    to ignore that fact,
    I end up getting out of bed
    20 minutes later
    to take the damn thing off
    because I know that's the only way
    I'll be comfortable.
    And as soon as it comes off
    and I'm ready to lay my head
    on my pillow and pass out,
    I become inspired to write about this
    "taking off my bra adventure"
    and immediately roll over
    to find a piece of paper and a pen.

    Life is funny sometimes.

    It's 5 in the morning.

    I haven't been able to stop
    laughing yet.




    Submitted on 2011-01-26 14:12:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i just hate when i do that!!!!
    i find it more annoying then funny though...
    mabe thats just me?
    | Posted on 2011-03-29 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the stream of consicousness style..

    and the ending...after all that trouble to get "sleep" comfortable...the ideas in my head will not fall asleep---

    and then the bra went back on?

    this is like a thought that won't let go of us...won't allow us to sleep..maybe some kind of worry...and when we finally come to terms with it...it's still there to deal with...keeping us up a little longer trying to figure out our next move.

    love the humor in this...put a smile on my day..

    thank you.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-02-28 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Elastic never sleeps well with me either, besides, it cuts off the circulation.
    | Posted on 2011-01-27 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      
    This was great. I just read another poem that wasn't too concerned with "poetry" & just kinda said it how it was, no holding back, this-is-it/what-happened & some [censored] just aint poetic. Some days I'd like to [censored] up whoever invented the bra, though I'm glad we're no longer wearing the cone-shaped ones. Christ. I like the intimate details you put into this. They're highly relatable & not over-dramatized. It's life. & after a long day there's still that damn bra keeping you awake & conformed & uncomfortable, enough to drive you over the edge.
    | Posted on 2011-01-27 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]


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