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    dots Submission Name: Hubris of The Edificedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 345
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsHubris of The Edificedots

    As if Narcissus could look
    Into a weeping pool
    Yet still on reflection fall in love

    The ancient tears, which were gathered there
    Around the puddle of our history
    In silent memoriam

    And what the heart does not see
    And when the eyes refuse to see
    They bury conscience in constructions of fake mythologies

    Behold this instant of gratification
    The grinning desperate smiles of satisfaction
    A blind mask to ratify a parasitic dream

    With each mouthful of its sweetest morsel
    A bitter bite on sickly candy coated floss
    To disguise the poison lurking in the after taste

    And to all we flock and sing our praise
    And more and more to gratify our days
    While the delicate cost and vicious price rapes us, from inside

    Each second of entertainment
    Spews the starvation of unseen children
    And rattles with its consumerist indifference, the confidence of all our lies

    We are the product of fallen and bloodied innocence
    And the sickness of this truth
    Is gnawing at the entrails of our comfortable lives

    We were lead into this deception
    Bullied and tyrannised into acceptance
    Deceived by the clever wool pulled surreptitiously over our eyes

    We were driven into the arms of fear
    To the isolation we all feel while living here
    On this inescapable planet of our unity with all the rest of our human family

    The hubris of the edifice
    Would have you already beaten
    Already chained you to their system
    Already enslaved you to their dominion
    Already chuckling in your veins
    As for this life you have you have paid
    To the parasites who think they can command your every action
    And each second of entertainment
    Spews the starving bellies of unseen children
    While the sickness of this truth
    Gnaws at the entrails of our comfortable lives

    How can we ever hope to rest
    Or grasp our true happiness
    While every smile is the desperateness

    Of denial

    Submitted on 2011-01-27 10:53:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed this piece! Your poems keep getting better and better. :)
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