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    dots Submission Name: Goodbyedots
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    Author: Raistlin Sith
    ASL Info:    22/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 106/182/66
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 645
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsGoodbyedots
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    this isn't how i saw myself,
    confident and full of fun,
    happy and responsible,
    this brutal war's been finally won.

    Last chapter has come to a close,
    it just took that careful word
    and the silence that came after
    for me to realize what I'd heard.

    I was hurting both of us,
    pushing you out ever more,
    begging you to come back in,
    watching you walk through that door.

    Your shadow kept receding,
    Each step bringing more despair
    I felt rejection setting in
    thinking this was only fair.

    the days just kept on passing by,
    numbness growing in my chest
    replacing all the sadness till
    i didn't know which one was best.

    I was sick of feeling bad or worse,
    and numb is worse than dead.
    it's knowing I could feel alive
    If I weren't locked inside my head.

    I thought of you, remembered us,
    and those moments I was free.
    I bit the bullet, got some help,
    It's time I started liking me.

    Out of the corner of my eye,
    A silhouette was creeping in
    gradually taking a shape,
    it's so good to meet again.




    Submitted on 2011-01-27 21:32:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this, it was a great pice and had a good understanding to it.
    | Posted on 2011-01-28 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]


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