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    dots Submission Name: conversations #17dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #17dots
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    you have eyes

    like (some people

    have) a plague of (fingers

    that are always moving)

    death (around) in my heart



    (like little fish) decaying

    (on the beach.) forever

    (struggling for air.) inside me.



    this makes me sad

    (that the water) to be

    (is forever) alive

    and (out of reach)



    without you.

    (is a tragedy.)




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      I tried to add this one to the favorites list & it still won't let me.
    | Posted on 2011-01-31 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]
      I read this novel not long ago by Amy Tan titled "Saving Fish From Drowning". I really enjoyed it. It was sorta comical, but human. At the beginning of the book, before it even starts, the author had this quote from some anonymous person that said:

    It is evil to take lives and noble to save them. Each day I pledge to save a hundred lives. I drop my net in the lake and scoop out a hundred fishes. I place the fishes on the bank, where they flop and twirl. Dont be scared. I tell those fishes. I am saving you from drowning. Soon enough, the fishes grow calm and lie still. Yet, sad to say, I am always too late. The fishes expire. And because it is evil to waste anything, I take those dead fishes to market and I sell them for a good price. With the money I receive, I buy more nets so I can save more fishes.

    That really stuck with me. The irony of it, & also how we alter reality to cope. The interaction of the two poems is just wonderful here & especially visual. These conversations are just so interesting to me. & each is unique, which is also remarkable, but they tie together well, like you could just keep reading & reading them. & there is this continuous theme of loss &, I want to say, sacrifice, kinda like how there are things meant to be & not.

    One typo: tragedy*
    | Posted on 2011-01-31 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]


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