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Winter Alotment

Author: Dead Bell
ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48 /129 /125
Words: 34
Class/Type: Poetry /
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Winter Alotment

Each tree bloody seerd
All passion come head-heavy.
Put the love-bulbs
Deep down
In aboreous fashion.
Put the dirty gloves

Now lay your smiling head
On some resting one

Submitted on 2011-01-28 21:44:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I'm amazed that this has gone uncommented so long.
Let me start by saying I really liked it.
The imagery was put together very ambigiously and faintly, I liked that it really adds to the tone of the piece. I see someone creating life (a garden) in the midst of winter, and then resting in the garden when they are finished.
Kind of taking on God-like qualities of creation and ownership.
I really liked this, it was.....refreshing.
| Posted on 2011-07-14 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]

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