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    dots Submission Name: Winter Alotment dots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsWinter Alotment dots
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    Each tree bloody seerd
    All passion come head-heavy.
    Snowdrop.
    Put the love-bulbs
    Deep down
    In aboreous fashion.
    Put the dirty gloves
    Aside.

    Now lay your smiling head
    On some resting one




    Submitted on 2011-01-28 21:44:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm amazed that this has gone uncommented so long.
    Let me start by saying I really liked it.
    The imagery was put together very ambigiously and faintly, I liked that it really adds to the tone of the piece. I see someone creating life (a garden) in the midst of winter, and then resting in the garden when they are finished.
    Kind of taking on God-like qualities of creation and ownership.
    I really liked this, it was.....refreshing.
    | Posted on 2011-07-14 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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