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    dots Submission Name: Religion=Mind Controldots

    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 650
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsReligion=Mind Controldots

    This science will be the end of of us.

    Intwined with Earths greatest minds, we'll make answers

    for every question.

    Knowing all…understanding nothing..

    These machines will take us now..harvest our bodies for energy..

    Dispatching our minds into nothingness..

    Melting the bodies into oblivion..

    It's no matter of the better man,

    Or "No, i cant" and "yes, i can."

    Vastly outlast, these objects that we humans leave behind..

    Miss-commanded understanding, predetermined fate in hand

    Call it human nature how the blind prefer the blind..

    Now i demand a reprimand of human hand in circumstance.

    The sifting sands of decadence has left us cloaked in ignorance.

    Religion equals mind control, to find control you must let go..

    Born of chaos, bred of violence, Now we begin the awkward silence..






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      To some limit, I agree with it. There were a lot of weird signs as I read it ………. I don't know where that came from, but it looks kind of strange. You use a bunch of extended words, they may be a bit too much, you could simplify the poem without destroying the meaning :)
    | Posted on 2011-02-01 00:00:00 | by klikko | [ Reply to This ]

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